Hey Andrew-
First off- congrats on even coming up with a cool ad to post. You're already going to go far.
Now for my honest advice-
#1) Less is more. Not too wordy with the ad. People, in general, have very short attention spans. As others have said in their posts, and I agree with this, keep them curious, keep them nosey, don't tell them everything in one shot.
#2) And this is an ABSOLUTE- Please check your spelling and your grammar. THIS IS IMPERATIVE. You want to look as professional as possible. If you want to be known as being associated with an INC 500 company, then your ad must have proper grammar and spelling. I am not a great speller by any means whatsoever, so I type up all of my ads in MS WORD at first, it has an automatic spell checker. When all my spelling checks out, then I run my ad.
Also with your grammar and spelling you say, "...Global Domains International are one of Americas fastest growing companys."
It should read- Global Domains International is one of America's fastest growing companies.
Not trying to be nit-picky, but you MUST come off as a professional and there are MANY people who will pick up on this and judge you wrongly on your spelling and grammar not knowing that you are a cool and smart guy just trying to run an honest business.
Hope this helps. Keep up the good work.
Peace
T_Andre
PS: If there are any mis-spellingz in my post feel free to correct me on it. I can always learn and improve